Criticisms

Hello, this is where I would like to ask you all to share criticisms of one another's RP.
Such as the quality of one's RP, the nation they have, and other things like that.
Here the rules:
1. Don't be rude. (Obviously)
2. Give legitimate criticisms.
3. If you wish to be critiqued, go ahead and post Critique Me in this thread.
4. Don't criticize someone who's not involved in this.
With that all out of the way, I'm proud to say let's begin.
Critique me! (Be gentle ><)